Note: Our YouTube stream dropped for 15 minutes in the middle, so this is the full episode reposted. Scroll to the bottom of the description to view the chat comments. For this Critique of the Week, we'll be looking at two poems each by Judith Faye and B.L. Pike. Tune in to find out what that means, learn a little, and give the authors some feedback in the comments! At the end of every month, we do a drawing to select the next round of participants. If you'd like to have your own poems critiqued on live video, find the Critique of the Week category on our Submittable page: https://rattle.submittable.com/submit/177206/critique-of-the-week As always, do click "full screen" or turn your phone sideways, so that the text is large enough that you can read along. Also, to get notifications when we go live with these, go to our Facebook page, click on "Follow" and then turn on notifications, or click the notification bell on YouTube. Attracta Fahy ​Hi all, Bluetooth again this evening, but looking forward to listening. James Langford ​Hello diane benitez ​Good Morning Clayton Clark ​Hello Everyone! Cindy Gore ​Hey, everybody Nate Jacob ​Hey there, poets! Dick Westheimer ​Lunch with poets. Not a bad mid-day break. D. Coleman ​Greetings all! Karen Harvey ​Hi from Wales UK Eithne L ​hello all ! Cindy Gore ​bouquet of… teens is great image Dick Westheimer ​Love the movement in this. It would be enhanced with fewer adjectives and stronger verbs. Deb T ​I can piece it together. Cindy Gore ​Me, too Dick Westheimer ​The “beseech - Why can’t we all get along” feels cliche. Perhaps move the quote to the epigram. diane benitez ​I vote for the date for clarity. Alan Harvey ​I don't get the Rodney King reference. Clayton Clark ​I don't know where we are until: Why can't we all... Cindy Gore ​ the quote needs to be with beaten face image Cindy Gore ​If you move it, that’s lost D. Coleman ​chic shop is a bit of a tongue twister. Deb T ​I wonder about still "ripe". I associate it with smelling bad. Eithne L ​lovely alliteration in that short stanza Deb T ​yes, Ethene Deb T ​I was thinking it was the location that wedded together the engagement and the beating. But, maybe not. Deb T ​but I don't know where the beating happened so I'm probably wrong diane benitez ​I thought for a moment that the long black limo was a hearse. James Langford ​He asks her (again) - ? Again ? not explored at all Deborah Martin ​Perhaps the anguish to come connects to the Rodney King event Clayton Clark ​Really good poem hiding in there Cindy Gore ​Agree, Clayton Cindy Gore ​Imaginative, Judith! Deb T ​I agree....clever, fun. Good images. Dick Westheimer ​I love so much of this. The glib conversation takes me out of what has some real weight here - the comparisons with those other ladies. Deb T ​the combination of lightness with weightier stuff underneath works for me D. Coleman ​I love the image of the used soap looking like a bone. They do look just like cuttlebones--the ones you give to small pet birds. James Langford ​Sometimes she used quotes and sometimes not. Please let us know the right way Tim. D. Coleman ​I love giving inanimate objects human attributes and imagining conversations with them. Deb T ​I don't get the last line Dick Westheimer ​Yes, end with “to use beauty.” Clayton Clark ​I like the moment she says, "I just want to keep you forever." I feel the loneliness there. Dick Westheimer ​The essence seems to be a comparison with the other women - the ambivalence the recognition of who the N is. Kim Vaughn ​Drop “free” Deb T ​like keeping her face in a jar by the door Welcome to live chat! Remember to guard your privacy and abide by our community guidelines. James Langford ​I lost the connection - not sure if it is at my end or your end. There is no image or sound. I;ll have to catch the recorded version. It seems I can still type a message though Clayton Clark ​Oh, me too! Thanks James ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=MIzhNWXJIkw

Our first Rattlecast livestream will feature Benjamin Aleshire, a poet-for-hire who travels the world writing poems for strangers on a manual typewriter. He'll read poems from his new book, Currency, and talk to Rattle editor Timothy Green about his life as a traveling bard, Instagram poetry, and more. For more on Benjamin Aleshire, and to order his book, visit: https://www.poetforhire.org ... https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=zWbCz2A2164